The Grandma Pond

THE GRANDMA POND



Today was like any day but when I past the paper boy wasn't yelling extra extra! He was on the ground crying!
I walked up to him and asked whats wrong. He sobbed as he told me the story.
''My grandma didn't listen to her eye doctor and went to feed the ducks at the pond.'' And when she tripped over debris and fell in the pond.'' Her arms got stuck under some rocks and drowned.'' 
I tried to save her but but.''
''It's okay now.'' I said 
''Thanks grandpa.

Comments

  1. What a sad story. You are getting better at your punctuation for dialogue. Remember you need quotations at the very end after Grandpa. You also don't need quotation marks in the middle of someone speaking. Fix these few things are you are on your way to a great story.

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